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"The Echo Between Us"

Ashok Bhatnagar
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Submitted to Contest #4 in response to the prompt: 'Past follows you when you move to a new city for a fresh start'





When Meera boarded the train to Mumbai, she carried only one suitcase — yet inside her mind, she dragged a lifetime of memories, regrets, and silences too loud to ignore.
Delhi had been a mess — not the city, but what it had meant for her. The narrow alleys of her neighborhood still echoed with her name, whispered in scandal, screamed in heartbreak. A broken engagement, a father’s disappointment, a mother’s helpless tears, and her own shame woven deep into her identity — these weren’t things she could leave behind by simply buying a train ticket. But Mumbai, she hoped, could be her clean slate.
She took up a small flat in Bandra. It had peeling paint and a broken latch on the kitchen window, but it overlooked the sea. That mattered more. Every evening, she would sit with a cup of tea and watch the waves crash against the rocks, pretending each wave was a memory washing away.
Meera found work at an independent publishing house. The owner, Mr. Rao, was an old literature professor with kind eyes and an affinity for Byron. Her job was to edit unsolicited manuscripts — most of which were terrible — but occasionally, she’d find a gem. Those moments reminded her why she loved words.
A month into her new life, she met Aarav.
He was late for his pitch meeting and had forgotten to carry a hard copy of his manuscript. She was annoyed before he’d even said hello.
“Sorry I’m late,” he said, out of breath, brushing his thick hair from his forehead. “Traffic. And I lost my pen drive. But I emailed the draft this morning.”
She raised an eyebrow. “You’re pitching a book and didn’t carry a single page with you?”
“I’m pitching a feeling,” he grinned, sitting down across from her.
Despite herself, Meera smiled.
Aarav’s story was raw and real — a deeply personal tale of grief, redemption, and love. She found herself absorbed in his words, feeling something stir in her chest. He noticed the tears she tried to blink away.
“That part,” she said, closing the laptop. “Where the woman forgives him. Did that happen in real life?”
Aarav looked out the window. “I wish it had.”
Something unspoken passed between them.
In the weeks that followed, Aarav became a fixture at the publishing house. Rewrites, edits, discussions — his story transformed under Meera’s watchful eyes. They spent hours talking about words, love, regrets, and what they’d do differently if given another chance.
One rainy afternoon, he asked, “What did you leave behind?”
The question was sudden, but gentle.
She hesitated. “A man who said he loved me but couldn't stand beside me when it mattered.”
Aarav nodded. “I left behind a woman I betrayed.”
They didn’t ask for more.
Their connection grew, quietly but undeniably. He'd bring her vada pav on long days, she’d send him quotes from novels at midnight. At some point, their silences grew more comfortable than words.
Then, one evening, she found herself waiting for him at Marine Drive, heart thumping.
“I think I’m falling for you,” she said softly, afraid of the answer.
He looked at her for a long moment. “I’m scared too.”
They sat side by side, the sound of waves louder than ever.

But life, like stories, isn’t always linear.
A few weeks later, Meera’s past caught up with her. She was walking home from work when she heard someone call her name. A voice she hadn’t heard in over a year.
“Meera?”
She turned. It was Rishi.
He looked thinner. More tired. But still the same man who had once held her hands and whispered forever.
“What are you doing here?” she asked, startled.
“I had a meeting. I wasn’t even sure it was you.” He paused. “You look… different.”
“I am.”
Rishi nodded. “I’ve been trying to reach you. Your number changed. Your email bounced.”
“I needed distance,” she said. “You made that clear when you left.”
He winced. “Meera, I made a mistake. A huge one. I panicked. I was scared of what people would think. Of the noise, the judgment. I shouldn’t have let go.”
She stayed quiet.
“I came to apologize,” he said finally. “Not to get you back. Just to say I’m sorry. You didn’t deserve that.”
His words stung more than she’d expected. But she also felt… nothing. Not hate, not longing. Just the weight of old pages turning.
“I forgave you a long time ago,” she said. “But I also forgave myself.”
They parted with a handshake — two people who had once dreamt of a lifetime, now just two stories that no longer overlapped.

But fate had one more test for her.
The next day, she walked into the office to find Aarav in a heated discussion with Mr. Rao. His voice was louder than usual.
When he saw her, he froze.
“Meera,” he said, voice cracking. “We need to talk.”
Mr. Rao quietly walked away.
“I was going to tell you,” Aarav said. “But I was scared.”
“What?”
“The woman in my book. The one I betrayed. It wasn’t just fiction. Her name was Ananya. And she… she was Rishi’s sister.”
Meera’s legs almost gave way.
“I met her two years ago. We fell in love. But I wasn’t ready. I broke her heart. I left. She hasn’t spoken to me since.”
Meera stared at him, betrayal rising like bile. “And you didn’t think to mention it?”
“I didn’t know you were connected. Not until you said his name. After that, I just... I didn’t want to ruin what we had.”
“What we had was honesty,” she said, stepping back.
He reached for her hand, but she pulled away.
“I need time,” she said, walking out.

The days that followed were a blur. Her past had collided with her present, leaving shards everywhere. She stopped editing. She stopped meeting Aarav. Even the sea felt louder, accusing.
But healing doesn’t wait for perfect endings.
One morning, she found an envelope under her door.
“To the woman who taught me how to rewrite pain.”
Inside was Aarav’s manuscript. Only this time, the last chapter had changed.
The man in the story didn’t chase the woman. He waited, and gave her space. He learned to become someone worthy — not through grand gestures, but by learning to live with what he had done. And in the final line, he wrote:
“Maybe love isn’t about moving on. Maybe it’s about making peace with the echo that follows you, and still choosing to whisper back.”
Meera cried.

Weeks passed. She slowly returned to editing. Smiled more. Slept better.
And one day, she found herself walking into the same café where Aarav had once pitched his story.
He was there, reading.
She sat across from him.
“I read your book,” she said. “You still misuse semicolons.”
He laughed, eyes wide with hope.
“I’m not promising anything,” she said, sipping her coffee. “But I’m willing to write a new story.”
“With me?” he asked.
She shrugged. “With honesty. We’ll see where it goes.”
And outside, the sea kept crashing — not erasing the past, but folding it gently into the present.

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Hey Ashok! The story is so beautifully written! I really enjoyed the depth and emotion in your story — I gave it a full 50 points. If you get a moment, I’d be grateful if you could read my story, “The Room Without Windows.” I’d love to hear what you think: https://notionpress.com/write_contest/details/5371/the-room-without-windows

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This story is a poignant reminder that some of life’s most powerful moments happen not in loud declarations but in quiet understandings. It\'s a story about love — not the perfect, idealized kind — but the kind that survives distance, mistakes, and silence.\nThe story explores the delicate space between the past and the present, showing how people change, heal, and sometimes, come back to rewrite their endings. Meera and Aarav aren’t flawless lovers. They are deeply human — carrying guilt, regrets, and scars. And that’s what makes their reunion feel earned, not fated.\nWhat stands out most is the emotional honesty of the narrative. Instead of offering a fairy-tale resolution, it offers something more powerful: hope grounded in growth. Meera doesn’t simply forgive — she evolves. Aarav doesn’t chase redemption — he becomes worthy of it.\nThis story isn’t about moving on.\n It’s about moving forward — with the past as a teacher, not a prison.\n

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