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Whispers in the Dark

Ashok.jahagirdar
CRIME
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Submitted to Contest #5 in response to the prompt: 'You overhear something you weren’t meant to. What happens next?'

The rain drummed against the windows of the old café, a steady rhythm that made the world outside feel distant. Claire tucked a loose strand of hair behind her ear and stirred her coffee absently, her book lying forgotten beside her. The café was nearly empty -- just her, the barista wiping down the espresso machine, and two men in the corner booth, speaking in hushed tones.
She hadn’t meant to eavesdrop. But when one of them said, “It has to be tonight. If we wait, he’ll disappear again,” her fingers stilled around her spoon.
Claire kept her eyes on her book, but her focus was entirely on their conversation.
“The warehouse by the docks,” the other man murmured. “Midnight. And make sure no one follows you.”
Her pulse quickened. This wasn’t just idle talk. There was an edge to their voices, something dangerous lurking beneath the surface.
The men stood abruptly, tossing cash onto the table. Claire ducked her head lower, pretending to read, but as they passed her booth, one of them -- a broad-shouldered man with a scar above his eyebrow -- glanced at her. His gaze lingered just a second too long.
Then they were gone, the bell above the door jingling behind them.
Claire exhaled shakily. She should forget what she’d heard. Walk away. But curiosity gnawed at her. What were they planning? Who was going to disappear?
She pulled out her phone and hesitated. She could call the police, but what would she say? *I overheard two men talking about meeting at a warehouse—*it wasn’t exactly a crime.

But something about it felt wrong.
That night, Claire found herself driving toward the docks, her hands tight on the wheel. She told herself she was just going to look. Just to see if anything was really happening.
The warehouse loomed ahead, its broken windows like hollow eyes. A single flickering streetlight cast long shadows across the pavement. Claire parked a block away and crept closer, her heart hammering.
Voices echoed from inside.
She pressed herself against the wall near a cracked-open loading door and peered inside.
The two men from the café stood in the dim light, along with three others. And in the center of the room, bound to a chair -- a terrified man with a bruised face.
“You shouldn’t have run,” the scarred man said, pulling out a gun.
Claire stifled a gasp. She stumbled back, her foot catching on loose gravel. The sound was barely audible, but one of the men inside snapped his head toward the door.
“Someone’s out there.”
Claire didn’t wait. She ran.
Footsteps pounded behind her. She sprinted to her car, fumbling with the keys. Just as she threw herself inside, a hand slammed against her window.
The scarred man glared at her through the glass.
She hit the gas.

The police didn’t believe her at first. But when she led them back to the warehouse, they found evidence of a struggle -- blood, rope, shell casings.
The men were gone. So was their prisoner.
A detective took her statement, his expression grim. “You’re lucky you got away,” he said. “These aren’t the kind of people you want noticing you.”
She couldn’t shake the image of the scarred man’s face pressed against her car window, his dark eyes burning into hers.
She should have felt safer now that the police were involved, but instead, as she entered her small apartment it felt thick with tension. Every creak of the floorboards made her jump. She checked the window -- locked. The blinds -- drawn.
Her phone buzzed. An unknown number.
Her breath hitched.
Unknown: You shouldn’t have gone to the cops.
Her stomach twisted. How did they get her number?
She dropped the phone like it had burned her. A second later, it buzzed again.
Unknown: We know where you live.
A sharp knock at her door made her gasp.
Claire froze.
Another knock -- harder this time.
She grabbed a kitchen knife, her pulse roaring in her ears.
“Claire?” A familiar voice. Detective Harris.
She exhaled shakily and opened the door.
The detective’s expression was grim. “We found the man they took. He’s alive, but barely. He gave us a name—Victor Raskov. Ring any bells?”
She shook her head.
“He’s Bratva. Russian mob. And now, thanks to you, they know we’re onto them.” He hesitated. “They’ll come for you.”

The police put her in a safe house -- a drab, windowless apartment on the outskirts of the city.
“Just for a few days,” Harris assured her. “Until we track them down.”
But Claire couldn’t sleep. Every noise was a threat. Every shadow, a lurking figure.
On the third night, the power went out.
She sat up in bed, gripping the knife she’d hidden under her pillow.
A soft click—the front door unlocking.
Her breath stopped.
Footsteps. Slow. Deliberate.
Then, a voice -- low, accented.
“Claire… we know you’re here.”
The scarred man.
She slid silently off the bed, creeping toward the bathroom. There was a small window -- barely big enough to squeeze through.
The footsteps grew closer.
She climbed onto the sink, pushed the window open, and—
The door burst open.
A flashlight beam blinded her.
She didn’t think. She jumped.
Claire hit the ground hard, pain shooting up her ankle. But she forced herself up, limping into the alley.

She heard shouts behind her.
Claire’s blood ran cold.
The news called it a “shootout between rival factions.”
Claire’s name was never mentioned.
But she knew the truth.

And as she boarded a bus out of the city, a single thought echoed in her mind:
Some secrets aren’t meant to be heard.
Because the scarred man had seen her face.
And now, he knew who she was.

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AMAZING. Seriously, amazing. My heart\'s pounding. I\'ve actually written a crime story too, except in this one, side effects may include siding with the thieves instead of the civilians :D :D. Anyway, I really hope you can check it out. Here\'s the link: I just entered a writing contest! Read, vote, and share your thoughts.! https://notionpress.com/write_contest/details/6175/the-group-chat-of-doom-a-vayne-mistake

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