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Echo in the wire

Bharath A.N.
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Submitted to Contest #5 in response to the prompt: 'You send a message to the wrong person. What happens next?'

The first mistake was a typo. A single, insignificant digit, a slip of the thumb on the slick glass of her phone. Elara, a creature of meticulous habit and ingrained paranoia, would later dissect that moment with the forensic precision of a bomb disposal expert examining a detonator. But in the hurried quiet of that Tuesday evening, it was just a message.
“It’s done. The package is secure. They suspect nothing.”
Sent. Not to her handler, Marcus, with his bland, corporate-issue pseudonym and reassuringly dull conversational patterns, but to a number she didn’t recognize. A ghost in her contacts, a digital wraith born of a misplaced keystroke.
She didn’t realize the error until the reply came, a full three hours later. Elara was brewing her third cup of chamomile tea, the steam a welcome veil against the sterile modernity of her apartment. Her phone buzzed on the granite countertop, a low, insistent hum that felt different from Marcus’s usual curt acknowledgments.
The message was a single word.
“Good.”
Elara stared at it. The font seemed sharper, the single word imbued with a chilling finality that Marcus’s “Received” or “Acknowledged” never possessed. A cold dread, slick and unwelcome, slithered down her spine. She checked the number. Not Marcus. A local prefix, but nothing she recognized. Her heart, a frantic bird in her chest, began to beat a staccato rhythm against her ribs.
She typed a reply, her fingers fumbling on the keys. “Sorry, wrong number.”
The three dots indicating the other person was typing appeared almost instantly. They remained there for a full minute, a silent, taunting dance on the screen. Then, another message.
“No, I don’t think so, Elara.”
The chamomile tea turned to acid in her stomach. He knew her name. She hadn’t included it in the message. Her profile was private, her number unlisted. She was a digital ghost, a phantom in the machine. That was her job. She analyzed data, found patterns, and delivered her findings to Marcus. She was the architect of shadows, not the one to be haunted by them.
Her training kicked in, a cold, hard wave of protocol washing over the rising tide of panic. She powered down her phone, pulled the SIM card, and snapped it in two. She moved to her laptop, her fingers flying across the keyboard, running diagnostics, checking for breaches, for any sign of intrusion. The system was clean. A fortress of her own design. But the feeling of being watched, of being known, was a virus that no software could detect.
The next day, the world felt…tilted. The familiar streets of the city seemed to hold a new, hidden menace. The faces of strangers were masks, their eyes lingering a second too long. At the sterile office where she worked, a place she usually found a strange comfort in its anonymity, she felt exposed, a specimen under a microscope.
Her new phone, a burner she’d acquired from a grimy electronics store in a part of town she usually avoided, remained silent. Marcus had been furious about the broken protocol, his voice a clipped, angry buzz over the encrypted line. She’d told him about the wrong number, but not the reply. How could she explain the inexplicable?
That evening, a package arrived at her apartment. A small, brown box with no return address. Her doorman, a friendly, grandfatherly man named George, had left it outside her door. She stared at it, her breath held tight in her chest. She hadn’t ordered anything.
With gloved hands, she carefully brought it inside. She scanned it for any electronic signals, for any hint of a trigger. Nothing. With a pair of tweezers, she slowly, painstakingly, unwrapped it.
Inside, nestled on a bed of black tissue paper, was a single, perfectly preserved blue butterfly. Its wings, the color of a twilight sky, were pinned to a small corkboard. Beneath it, a small, typed note.
“I know what you did to the Monarch.”
The Monarch. The codename for her last project. A deep-dive into the finances of a powerful, shadowy corporation suspected of funding terrorist activities. Her analysis had been the key, the thread she’d pulled that unraveled their entire network. The “package” she’d referred to in her message to Marcus was the final report, the one that had led to a series of high-profile arrests just last week. It was a ghost file, accessible only to her and Marcus.
The butterfly was a message. A symbol. The Monarch butterfly was their logo. And he knew. He knew her role, her secret life that was supposed to remain buried under layers of encryption and false identities.
The fear was no longer a slithering dread. It was a physical presence, a cold hand gripping her heart. She was no longer the hunter. She was the prey.
The next few days were a blur of paranoia. She swept her apartment for bugs twice a day. She varied her routes to work, her gaze constantly scanning her surroundings. She ate pre-packaged food, convinced her groceries were being tampered with. Sleep offered no respite, her dreams filled with the image of the blue butterfly, its wings beating silently against the glass of her mind.
He started to play with her. Small, insidious games that were designed to unravel her sanity. Her favorite brand of coffee, a rare, single-origin bean she had to special order, appeared on her doorstep. Her meticulously organized bookshelf was rearranged, the spines of the books spelling out a single word: SOON.
One evening, she came home to find her laptop open, a single sentence typed on the screen: “I like what you’ve done with the place.”
That was the breaking point. He had been inside her apartment. The fortress she had so carefully constructed had been breached. The locks, the alarms, the layers of security she had prided herself on, were nothing to him.
She called Marcus, her voice a strained whisper. “He’s been in my apartment. He knows everything.”
Marcus was silent for a long moment. When he finally spoke, his voice was grave. “This is bigger than we thought, Elara. We need to pull you out.”
“No,” she said, a new, unfamiliar resolve hardening her voice. “I’m not running. I’m going to find him.”
“That’s not your job,” Marcus insisted. “You’re an analyst, not a field agent.”
“He made it my job,” she retorted, the words tasting like ash in her mouth. “He came into my home. He threatened me. This is personal.”
She began to use her skills, not to hide, but to hunt. The number, the single thread connecting her to this phantom, was her only lead. She ran it through every database she had access to, both legal and illegal. It was a ghost, a burner number, just like hers. But even ghosts leave traces.
She cross-referenced the cell tower data for the time the messages were sent. The first, the single word “Good,” had pinged off a tower in a derelict industrial district on the outskirts of the city. The second, the one that used her name, came from a tower directly across the street from her apartment building. He had been watching her.
The industrial district was a wasteland of abandoned warehouses and rusting metal skeletons. It was a place where secrets went to die. Armed with a taser and a can of pepper spray, she went there at dusk, the setting sun casting long, ominous shadows.
She found the warehouse from the cell tower data. It was a cavernous, dilapidated structure, its windows shattered like broken teeth. The air inside was thick with the smell of dust and decay. Her footsteps echoed in the vast, empty space.
In the center of the warehouse floor, a single spotlight illuminated a small, wooden table. On the table was a laptop, open and waiting. As she approached, the screen flickered to life. A video feed appeared, showing the interior of her apartment. Her apartment, in real-time. She could see her favorite armchair, the half-finished book on the side table, the indentation on the cushion where she had been sitting just hours before.
A voice, distorted and metallic, emanated from the laptop’s speakers. “I see you got my invitation.”
“Who are you?” she demanded, her voice surprisingly steady.
“I’m the man who’s been living in your head for the past week,” the voice replied. “The one who knows your deepest fears, your darkest secrets.”
“What do you want?”
“I want you to understand, Elara. I want you to feel what it’s like to have your life dissected, your privacy stripped away, your every move watched and analyzed.”
A figure emerged from the shadows at the far end of the warehouse. He was tall and slender, his face obscured by the darkness. He walked with a limp, a slight, almost imperceptible drag of his left foot.
“You took everything from me,” he said, his voice no longer distorted. It was a calm, measured tone that was far more terrifying than the electronic growl. “My company, my reputation, my life. You, with your algorithms and your data points, you painted me as a monster, a financier of terror.”
He stepped into the light. He was older than she’d expected, with tired eyes and a face etched with lines of grief and anger. She didn’t recognize him.
“You don’t even know who I am, do you?” he said, a bitter smile twisting his lips. “I’m a ghost to you. A name on a spreadsheet.”
He told her his name. Arthur Cain. The CEO of the corporation she had dismantled. The Monarch.
“My company was legitimate,” he said, his voice trembling with a suppressed rage. “We were developing clean energy technology. We were on the verge of a breakthrough that would have changed the world.”
He told her about the smear campaign, the fabricated evidence, the whispers and lies that had brought his empire crashing down. He told her about the investors who had pulled out, the government contracts that had been cancelled, the employees who had lost their jobs. He told her about his wife, who had left him, unable to bear the public shame.
“You didn’t just ruin my company,” he said, his voice breaking. “You destroyed my life. And for what? For a report, a ‘package’ you so casually delivered.”
He had lost everything. And in the depths of his despair, he had found a new purpose. Revenge. He had used his considerable resources to find her, the faceless analyst who had been the architect of his ruin. He had wanted to make her feel the same terror, the same helplessness, that he had felt.
“I never knew,” she whispered, the words catching in her throat. “I just analyzed the data. I didn’t…I didn’t know.”
“That’s the problem, Elara,” he said, taking another step closer. “You and your kind, you sit in your sterile offices, divorced from the real world, and you play God with people’s lives. You don’t see the consequences. You don’t see the faces of the people you destroy.”
He raised a hand, and for the first time, she saw that he was holding a gun.
“And now,” he said, his voice flat and devoid of emotion, “you’re going to experience the ultimate consequence.”
Her heart hammered against her ribs, a frantic drumbeat of terror. She thought of the taser in her pocket, the pepper spray in her hand. But she knew they would be useless against a gun.
She looked into his eyes, and she saw not a monster, but a man broken by a system she was a part of. A man who had been stripped of everything, just as he had stripped her of her security, her sanity.
In that moment, she didn’t see a villain. She saw a reflection of herself, a dark mirror of what she could become.
“You’re right,” she said, her voice clear and strong, cutting through the tense silence of the warehouse. “I didn’t see you. I saw data points, not a person. And for that, I am truly sorry.”
Cain hesitated, his finger hovering over the trigger. Her words, her genuine remorse, had struck a chord, a flicker of humanity in the darkness of his despair.
It was in that moment of hesitation that the doors of the warehouse burst open, flooding the space with the blinding glare of headlights. Figures in tactical gear swarmed in, their weapons raised.
“Drop the weapon!” a voice boomed, amplified by a megaphone.
Cain looked at Elara, a flicker of something unreadable in his eyes. Then, he looked at the armed figures advancing on him. A wry, almost sad smile touched his lips. He raised the gun, not towards Elara, but towards the ceiling.
A single shot echoed through the warehouse, a final, defiant roar.
And then, silence.
Six months later, Elara sat on a park bench, the warm afternoon sun on her face. The city was still the same, the sounds, the smells, the faces of strangers. But she was different.
She had left her job. She could no longer be a ghost in the machine, a faceless analyst playing with lives she would never see. The encounter with Cain had shattered her world, but it had also, in a strange way, rebuilt it.
She had started a new life, a simpler one. She worked for a small non-profit, one that helped people who had been wronged by the system, people like Arthur Cain. It was her penance, her way of making amends.
A blue butterfly, a flash of vibrant color, fluttered past her, landing on a nearby flower. She watched it for a long moment, a sad smile touching her lips.
The wrongly sent message had been a mistake, a single, random error in a life built on precision and control. But it had also been a catalyst, a stone thrown into the placid waters of her existence, the ripples of which had changed her forever.
She was no longer a ghost. She was Elara. And for the first time in a long time, she felt truly alive. The fear was gone, replaced by a quiet strength, a hard-won understanding of the fragile, interconnected web of human lives. The world was no longer a collection of data points, but a tapestry of stories, each one unique, each one deserving of being seen. And she, in her own small way, was finally learning to read them.

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Your story is very heart touching and I have awarded you 50 points. Please reciprocate it. Read, vote, and share your thoughts.! https://notionpress.com/write_contest/details/6244/the-last-secret-love-.-lies.-salt

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AMAZING story. That last bit? Beautiful. Brilliant. Meanwhile, my story features sabotage, sarcasm, and a thief who really shouldn’t be in charge of planning anything. :D :D. https://notionpress.com/write_contest/details/6175/the-group-chat-of-doom-a-vayne-mistake

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