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Snake: The Fangs Within

Mohammed Kalith
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Submitted to Contest #5 in response to the prompt: 'You overhear something you weren’t meant to. What happens next?'

After a terrible accident left him stuck in bed, Rohan spent his days staring at the cracked ceiling of his dimly lit room. The nights weren’t any better. They brought no rest—only the sound of the monsoon winds hissing at his windows and his own racing thoughts. Sleep became a stranger, and worry became his only company.

One rainy evening, as the wind howled outside and thunder rumbled in the distance, Rohan heard muffled voices near his half-open bedroom door.

Curiosity mixed with unease. He slowly pulled himself to the edge of the bed, every movement sending pain through his fractured ribs. His fingers touched the cold floor as he leaned closer to listen, the sharp ache in his side momentarily forgotten.

He recognized the low voice of his father and the rough sound of his uncle.

“…it had to be done,” his father whispered, his voice calm and cold. “The reporter had evidence. He could have destroyed everything—our future, the election.”

“The police think it was just a mugging,” his uncle replied. “But what if someone else starts asking questions?”

“Then we’ll bury them too.”

Rohan froze. The pain in his body disappeared, replaced by a cold fear that crept up his spine. His father—a respected political leader—was a murderer? The very thought twisted in his stomach like a knife.

A storm of shock, anger, and betrayal swirled inside him. But above it all, one thought echoed loud in his mind: this can’t be hidden.

For two long days, Rohan wrestled with his thoughts. Memories of his father’s kind smile, encouraging words, and moments of fatherly care clashed with the horrifying truth he had overheard. Could it really be? The man he admired so deeply was a killer? The weight of his conscience pressed down on him like a heavy stone. Every heartbeat seemed louder and heavier until, finally, pushing past the pain, Rohan picked up his phone.

He called Arjun—his childhood friend, now a police officer known for being honest and fearless. They had shared countless memories, from childhood games to dreams of a better future.

Rohan told him everything. Every word felt heavy, loaded with fear and hope. His voice trembled, but he poured his heart out.

Arjun listened carefully, his silence comforting in its steadiness. Then he said in a calm, steady voice, “I’ll come tonight.”

Night came, wrapping the city in darkness. Rohan’s heart beat faster with every passing minute. At last, a soft knock broke the silence. He saw Arjun’s familiar face step into the room. For the first time in days, Rohan felt a flicker of hope, as though a ray of light had broken through his dark thoughts.

But then… he saw who followed Arjun.

His father. His uncle.

“Good evening, son,” his father said with a cold smile. “Did you really think we wouldn’t find out?”

Rohan’s eyes darted to Arjun, searching for the friend he trusted. But Arjun’s face was blank. No warmth. No hint of friendship. Only a chilling indifference that sent a fresh wave of fear crashing over Rohan.

“We let you believe that little story,” his uncle sneered. “Arjun works for us.”

The world seemed to spin. Rohan felt like the ground had disappeared beneath him. Betrayed—by his own blood and his best friend. His heart sank, and his hands trembled.

“Any last words?” his father asked softly, pulling a sharp dagger from his coat. The blade caught the faint light from the bedside lamp, gleaming like a snake ready to strike.

Then—a gunshot. Loud and sharp. His father staggered back, holding his bleeding shoulder.

Arjun stood firm, gun in hand, eyes blazing with anger and determination. “I lied… to them.”

His uncle rushed forward, but Arjun fired again. The room burst into chaos. Shouts filled the air. Moments later, police officers stormed in, taking control of the scene.

Rohan’s heart raced. Arjun had tricked them all. He hadn’t betrayed Rohan—he had been protecting him all along.

“I knew they’d come for you,” Arjun said, snapping handcuffs on the men. “I had to pretend I was with them. If I didn’t, they would have killed you.”

Relief poured through Rohan, washing away the fear that had gripped him for days. The nightmare was real—but so was true friendship, the kind that risked everything to stand by you.

As his father was dragged away, their eyes met. His father’s look wasn’t angry… it was empty, hollow. “You chose them over your family.”

Rohan held his gaze and replied quietly but firmly, “I chose what’s right.”

Those words hung in the air like a final verdict—a truth that needed no further explanation.

Weeks later, Rohan stood on the courthouse steps. The sun warmed his face as the city buzzed around him with its usual noise and life. His wounds had healed, at least on the outside. But inside, the lessons, the betrayals, and the scars remained, shaping him into someone stronger.

Some choices leave deep marks. Some betrayals cut right through the heart. But courage? Courage leaves a legacy—a story worth telling.

Because sometimes, the greatest stories aren’t the ones we write… they’re the ones we survive.

And Rohan had survived his. He had faced the darkest truths, stood up for what was right, and chosen his path, even when it meant standing alone.

In the end, it wasn’t just a story of betrayal or even survival. It was a story of courage, of making choices when it mattered most—and living to tell the tale.

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What an incredible plot twist truly unexpected and brilliantly executed. I was captivated by how seamlessly the story unfolded, and the ending left me with such a warm, fulfilling feeling. Congratulations on crafting such a memorable experience for readers like us. Looking forward to many more stories that inspires and surprise.

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Good

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What an unbelievable story! Great job keep it up. Add some masalas.

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Great storytelling!!

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